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| (c) C.L.R. 2014 |
sun dips
beyond conception
listen
gnats buzz moving in circles
ducks paddle with the current
by the riverside
longing for meaning
seagull echoes
river retreats
in silence
secret
reflectionsor
twilight emulates
clarity
liquid tranquility
(c) Tournesol 2014
Very powerful - those first three lines had me reall thinking - beyond conception - wonderful line. the tiny gnat's circular movements, too, takingus back to the sun again, really clever, Beautiful ending.
ReplyDeleteThank you...I sat on it for hours until I got the second line to match what I thought. Times I wish I had a better vocabularly or could draw.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful solo renga, Cheryl. I too was drawn in by the "beyond conception" line. I also dig the seagull echos. I'd love to see another two line capping verse to complete it. :)
ReplyDeleteIt was complete at `seagulls` adding the rest is sharing my individual process...probably too much information:)
DeleteThis is a fine power post Cher ... each stanza is a pearl.
ReplyDeleteGrazie, Cara...a pearl...wow, I am touched!
DeleteYour wonderful imagery had me standing on that river bank.
ReplyDeleteA nice place to be...always, all seasons, the river listens and inspires.
Deletetomorrow the sun will rise
ReplyDeleteon the same new river
cheers
JzB
Lovely...I was raised by the riverside ...on the side of the sunrise too:)
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